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THE ABANDONED COTTAGE
On sunday I was playing in the woods when i got lost
i stumbled into an abandoned cottage. i went inside
where i find a book with ripped pages and it smelled
like dust. i open it then all of a sudden spiders crawled out.
I JUMPED BACK DROPPING THE BOOK ON THE FLOOR!
The floor broke and fell into a pit along with me….
My legs were akeng. i must have been 60 meters into
the ground. there was no way back up. then i noticed
an old, rickety door. i opened it. it fell off its hinges CRASH!!!
There was nothing in there except for a coffin. it opened.
i almost fainted!! a dead thing emerged from the coffin! it was
after me! i ran out trying every way possible to climb out……
i stumbled into an abandoned cottage. i went inside
where i find a book with ripped pages and it smelled
like dust. i open it then all of a sudden spiders crawled out.
I JUMPED BACK DROPPING THE BOOK ON THE FLOOR!
The floor broke and fell into a pit along with me….
My legs were akeng. i must have been 60 meters into
the ground. there was no way back up. then i noticed
an old, rickety door. i opened it. it fell off its hinges CRASH!!!
There was nothing in there except for a coffin. it opened.
i almost fainted!! a dead thing emerged from the coffin! it was
after me! i ran out trying every way possible to climb out……
THE END
Hi Lincoln,
ReplyDeleteThis is a really good piece of writing that has a good beginning and ending. Maybe next time you should try fix your spelling and punctuation.
From Nathan J.
Fantastic writing Lincoln, don't forget to go back and review your work once you get all the ideas down. Keep it up.
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