My Taniwha-Writing

For the past few weeks we have been practising using descriptive language in our writing. We have been trying to 'paint pictures with words.' We all got to invent our own taniwha.  We all drew our own taniwha and then we had to write about it and describe what it looks like, what we do with our taniwha and what our taniwha is like. Then we read our work to a buddy and they had a go at drawing our taniwha                                                                                     

Create and Describe Your Own Creature

(Nogard - taniwha)

WALT: be descriptive in our writing.  

Look at the description of a Nogard.  Now Create and describe your own creature that you will then be able to read to a buddy so that they can draw it.  Your description must be as detailed and clear as possible so that when you share it with others they will be able to visualise and draw you creature. Use lots of adjectives (describing words - big, small, round, green).

You must .....

• Have a name for your creature
• Start from the big things and work your way to the smaller things
• Describe the shapes
• Describe its neck, body, tail, wings etc.
• What does its head look like?Think about its eyes, nose, eyebrows, mouth, teeth
• Describe its legs/flippers/fins etc.
• What colours is it?
• Any extra details on the body like scales, spikes etc.
• Keep it simple and clear!
• Use correct punctuation and spelling.
• Check that your sentences make sense.

Remember that a good writer ‘paints’ pictures in their reader’s head with words.   This is what good descriptive writing does.  

Create your piece of writing here                           Lincoln

                                                            Water Beast

Have you ever heard of a Taniwha called Water Beast? Well I have. He is the guardian of the ocean. He looks like a merman and a sea serpent. He has a round head.  He has a long body like a serpent and a long curly tail.He has a pounamu guardian staff. He is huge. His body is kikorangi  like the deep sea, He has red māori tattoos on his face. He also has a long curly tail. He swims like a swimming sea serpent. He can also camouflage in the sea. He has three horns on each side of his head and each side of his tail.  He has no legs and he has two arms. When I ride him he makes a swoosh sound. I ride him to the bottom of the ocean and sometimes we see Tangaroa and he gives us beautiful gifts. He calls them the prizes of the ocean. Me and my taniwha have great fun together.

My drawing of my taniwha                                            Mackenzies drawing of my taniwha

Peer Evaluation   Name of Peer: Mackenzie

What I think you did well:  I think that Lincoln described the colours of his taniwha well.

What I think you could improve on: I think That Lincoln could have described how big his Taniwha was better.

Self Evaluation

What I think I did well: I think that my drawing and my title was done well

What I could improve on: Is my māori language.