Planet Writing

Create and Describe Your Own Planet -

Description writing task

Term 2 Weeks 5-6

Purpose of this piece of writing is to:

Learning Intentions

I am learning to use language features to make
my writing interesting and engaging for the reader.

I am learning to use topic-specific vocabulary.

I am learning to include Te Reo Māori words in my writing.

I will be successful when I can show….

-I have used some language features
to make my writing interesting and
engaging (simile, metaphor, alliteration, onomatopoeia, rhyme)

-I have carefully chosen some topic
specific words to include in my writing.

-I have used some Te Reo Māori

Focus

We are continuing to look at descriptive writing. This week you are writing a
descriptive piece of writing to promote your imaginary planet. You aim is to convince people to move
to you
r planet. You want your writing to allow the reader to be able to imagine what it is like on your planet.

First, we will look at an excerpt
of a video describing the moon from the Avatar movie. Click here to get to video= Pandora.

Second, we will discuss together what
you will need in your work to make it successful and
look at how to plan our work. Then you will plan your work and check with a teacher
before you start writing.

Third, do your piece of writing.

Fourth, complete you piece of writing. Remember
to proof-read (check spelling and punctuation) and edit (does it make sense? do
you need to change any sentences?) yourself and with a buddy and fill in your self and
peer-assessment. Check it with a teacher.

my writing

Mandalore is a planet/whetūao in the outer rim of an
unknown galaxy/ikurangi far far away. Mandalore does
not orbit a planet. It has humongous scorching deserts with
cities as big as the Earth! The deserts are vast plains with
cracks and dust everywhere with nothing in sight except
orange/karaka and yellow/pungapunga dust and sand.
There are scavengers and pirates scavenging remains
of ruined rusty broken starships. The cities have uneven
gravity and are mostly made up of credit factories
(Credit factories are basically money factories) and trading
stands.

Most dangers are scavengers, pirates and death watch.
The death watch are mandalorians that kill anyone.
They don’t have a permanent base because they move
around lots. But once they find a good spot with a mine so
they can mine and make metal so they can make more armor
for new troops. But once all the metal is gone they move to
another spot and the leader of the death watch is pre vizsla
and he has a gun and the darksaber.

The planit is lead by Duchess Satine
Kryze but was overthrown by darth Maul and Savage
Opress and the death watch. but darth maul was the new
leader because he killed Pre Vizsla. But some of the death
watch did not want to be on darth maul’s team so they tried to
kill darth maul but he killed them. I believe that you definitely
do not want to go to mandalore AT ALL!

By Lincoln .R.